#7: Nguyen Ha Son Tung

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Contestant #7: Nguyen Ha Son Tung
Bo Trach 1 Highschool
Email: nguyenhasontung@gmail.com

Topic #2: Introduce your hometown to a friend who is visiting QB.

I am very glad to hear that you are going to Quang Binh with your family on next month. If you don’t mind, I will be a tour guide for you and help you during your holiday. You know, Quang Binh is a poor land but nature has been awarded with some beautiful sites such as Phong Nha cave, Da nhay beach, hot spring, etc… I will introduce Quang Binh to you.

The first place you should visit when you come to Quang Binh is Phong Nha – Ke Bang National Park. It is located 50 km northwest of Dong Hoi city. It contains hundreds of square kilometers of rainforest and over 300 caves. Tourists go there to study butterflies, visit caves, etc… Besides, it has some animals in the “Red Book” that need protecting. Especially, all the primitive stone caves were preserved in their original form. Thus, when entering these caves, you almost feed like you are going on a trip to the centre of the earth. Among 300 caves, Phong Nha cave is the most famous because it is one of the most beautiful caves in the world. Although it was discovered earlier, it was not until 2003 that Phong Nha cave was certified as a World Natural Heritage by UNESCO. You can stand in cave for hours to see magnificent stalactites and enjoy the clean air with your family and friends.

Next, Quang Binh does not only have the “gold forest” but also have the “silver sea”. Came to Quang Binh, you must go to the beaches. It has some famous beaches such as mysterial Nhat Le beach, Duc Trach…, especially Da Nhay Beach. It is beautifully neglecting and fascinating. Standing on the expanse of white sand to see stones go up and down on the water or to hear sounds of wave touching the rocks is very exciting. It is wonderful if you swim under the cool sea water and enjoy some seafood on hot summer day. At night, you can light a camp fire and then, dancing and singing around it.

In addition, Quang Binh is the land of rich cultural and famous people. It is the fatherland of Vo Nguyen Giap, who is the leader of the Vietnamese people’s army in Dien Bien Phu and the Ho Chi Minh campaign. You can visit his old house in Le Thuy and learn about his background and glorious feat of arms. Besides, it is a place where witnessed Me Suot drive ferry-boat to transfer soldier cross the river. Nowadays, on the Nhat Le River bank has a statue of Me Suot to commemorate service of her. If you visit Quang Binh on Independence Day, you will see the regatta in Gianh River, where is a fine line between south and north from in the early 17th to in the late 18th, or you can take part in the traditional games in Ngu Thuy, Tuyen Hoa…

I am sure that you will be pleased with them. To enable the province to develop, Quang Binh province people's committee decided to build an airport, so you can come to here easily. I hope that Quang Binh will be a wonderful destination for your vacation.

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