#048: Nguyen Thi Bich Hao

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Curriculum vitae

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I. Personal biography.
1. Full name: NGUYEN THI BICH HAO.
2. Sex: Female.
3. Date of birth: 2141991.
4. Permanent residence
Duc oa village, tuyen hoa district, quang binh province
5. Temporary residences.
Duc Hoa village, Tuyen Hoa district, Quang Binh province
6. Ethnic group: Kinh,
Religion: none
7. Education level:
Primary education, secondly education.
8 .Date of participation in Ho Chi Minh communist youth union:
26/3/2006
9. Profile of your self:
Graduated from the general secondary school:
- From 1992 to1998: Childhood.
- From 1999 to 2005: student of primary Duc Phu School.
- From 2005 to 2007: student of Duc Hoa secondary school
- From 2007 until now; Student of Phan Boi Chau high school.
II. Family relation ship:
10. Full name of father: Nguyen Thanh Binh.
Year of birth: 1943
- From august, 1945 to 1954: childhood
1954-1957: childhood.
- 1957-1970: Pupil of general secondary school
- From 1975 until now: Farmer
11, full name of mother: Doan Thi Mai
Year of birth: 1946
- From 1946 to 1957: childhood.
- 1957-1970: Pupil of general secondary school
- From 1975 until now: Farmer
12. Full name of brother and sister.
Full name of firth brother Nguyen Ngoc Ban, born in 1979
Current residence: Ho Chi Minh City
- Secondary brother: Nguyen Van Tuyen, born in 1982.
Current residence: Ho Chi Ming city.

First sister: Nguyen Thi Duyen, born in 1984.
Current residence: Ho Chi Minh City
- Secondary sister: Nguyen Thi Bon.
- Current residence: Dong Hoi city student of university.

III. Writing about myself:
I am Bich Hao. I was born in 1991, in a poor village. There are seven members in my family: My parents, to brothers, two sisters and me. My Father and My mother are Farmers. In Spite of shortage and poorness, we are happy and affectionate. I love them very much because they are lovely, friendly, and bringing for me all good conditions. I used to spend my spare time on learning. I felt very happy when I was a little girl because I did not worry about everything. Now I am in grade 11A, I am a student at Phan Boi Chau high school, I Worry about learning. It is very difficult for me, because of the improvement and advance of book program. So I always try my best to study. After I graduate from high school, I have knowledgably enough to take part in university exams. Therefore, I always study hard and do my homework fully at school and at home. My favorite subject is math, history and English. It is interesting and useful for me. To be good at these subjects, whenever I find a book which is interesting I buy it immediately read all good books, and collect the important problem in small album. Now, I am depending on my parents as I come from a poor family, I always work something to help them such as: cut down grass for animals, grow trees, and clean my house...
Moreover, I often help my mother cooking, which I do like best. Sometime, I and my friends gather together to play volleyball, chat, play badminton in my free time. All through the year, I go for walks along the shore, in summer, when the weather very hot, I go for swimming everyday in gianh river. I like classical music because it is gentle, sweet. It is very interesting program “Read to Olympia Peak’’ and “Ringing golden” on television to watch for me. It helps me improve knowledge: know more information about education, culture, and human achievements. I like wearing “Ao Dai’’, which is woman’s fashion, it is very pride to wear it, this is a traditional culture in Viet Nam.
Although I too youth to seek money for studying, I try sort my time suitable to help my family. In my opinion, the time very important. Time help me put things in a definite order. It makes my way of life possible. My hobby is reading novel. I fine it faccinate and useful from reading. This is a hobby which servers a double purpose: while I am occupying my time usefully, I also at the same time gain knowledge and wisdom. Thanks to reading novel, my knowledge is improved. However, I hate smoking, cigarette smoking is very dangerous. It causes many kinds of serious

smoke such as lung cancer, heart disease. I wish life in the world is peafowl, the environment don’t be polluted.
At present, I want to acquaint with all people in order to share my happiness like sadness. I like having many good friends, who have good quality: constancy, unselfishness, loyalty and sympathy. I want to participate in voluntary clubs. If I a volunteer, I will help the people who have suffered badly and handicapped children, such as clean up their house, mow their lawns, I believe that some of the happiest people in my life are those which help to bring happiness to others.
In future, I want to be teacher English, by my knowledge: I will teach many pupils understand all things. My teacher, who is an accomplished teacher, taught me how to learn, I admire her very much because she is very good at speaking English.
I’m very fun because my family and my teacher always help me to pass difficulties. I hope that this is a good condition for me to learn and to get a successful in my life. So, I want to take part in this exam to rub with challenge. Moreover, in can help me broaden my knowledge in writing killing English.
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[Riêng]

Result: Pass
Comment:

Dear Bich Hao,

First of all, thank you for your participation in our writing contest. You have described yourself briefly and given to the readers more than enough information about you (actually you do not need to submit your CV, just the essay is enough). I have to say that I am really satisfied with your content.

However, you make too many mistakes in your essay, from spelling (vocabulary, capital) to grammar (singular/plural noun, verb form) and all of them are very basic in English that would be hard to accept in a writing contest.

Truly speaking, I am considering between let you pass the contest (about the content) or rewrite (after you fix all your mistakes) and resubmit your essay and I decide to let you pass the first round. I want to encourage you - a student who is living in a very far and poor place in Quang Binh but has a good sense in English as well as in everything around you.

I want you to reread your essay, especially remember all your mistakes I have pointed out. Try to avoid them in the next essay and hope to see you again, in a better performance. Keep up!

Thank you, with best regards.

Curriculum vitae

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I. Personal biography.
1. Full name: NGUYEN THI BICH HAO.
2. Sex: Female.
3. Date of birth: 21/4/1991.
4. Permanent residence
Duc Hoa village, Tuyen Hoa district, Quang Binh province
5. Temporary residence.
Duc Hoa village, Tuyen Hoa district, Quang Binh province
6. Ethnic group: Kinh
Religion: none
7. Education level:
Primary education, secondary education.
8. Date of participation in Ho Chi Minh communist youth union:
26/3/2006
9. Profile of your self:
Graduated from the general secondary school:
- From 1992 to1998: Childhood.
- From 1999 to 2005: student of primary Duc Phu School.
- From 2005 to 2007: student of Duc Hoa secondary school
- From 2007 until now; Student of Phan Boi Chau high school.
II. Family relationship:
10. Full name of father: Nguyen Thanh Binh.
Year of birth: 1943
- From august, 1945 to 1954: childhood
1954-1957: childhood.
- 1957-1970: Pupil of general secondary school
- From 1975 until now: Farmer
11. Full name of mother: Doan Thi Mai
Year of birth: 1946
- From 1946 to 1957: childhood.
- 1957-1970: Pupil of general secondary school
- From 1975 until now: Farmer
12. Full name of brother and sister.
Full name of first brother Nguyen Ngoc Ban, born in 1979
Current residence: Ho Chi Minh City
- Second brother: Nguyen Van Tuyen, born in 1982.
Current residence: Ho Chi Ming city.

First sister: Nguyen Thi Duyen, born in 1984.
Current residence: Ho Chi Minh City
- Second sister: Nguyen Thi Bon.
- Current residence: Dong Hoi city student of university.

III. Writing about myself:
I am Bich Hao. I was born in 1991, in a poor village. There are seven members in my family: My parents, two brothers, two sisters and me. My father and my mother are farmers. In spite of shortage and poorness, we are happy and affectionate. I love them very much because they are lovely, friendly, and they bring for (omit: for) me all good conditions. I used to spend my spare time on studying. I felt very happy when I was a little girl because I did not worry about anything. Now I am in grade 11th and I am a student at Phan Boi Chau high school, I worry about learning. It is very difficult for me, because of the improvement and advance of book program. So I always try my best to study. After I graduate from high school, I have enough knowledge to take part in university exams. Therefore, I always study hard and finish all my homework at school and at home.

My favorite subjects are math, history and English. They are very interesting and useful for me. To be good at these subjects, whenever I find a book which is interesting I buy it immediately. I read all good books and collect the important matters in a small album. Now, I am dependent on my parents as I come from a poor family, I always want to do something to help them such as: cut down grass for animals, grow trees, and clean my house...
Moreover, I often help my mother cook, which I do like best. Sometimes, I and my friends gather together to play volleyball, chat, play badminton in my free time. All through the year, I go for walks along the shore. In summer, when the weather is very hot, I go for swimming everyday in Gianh river.

I like classical music because it is gentle and sweet. There are very interesting programs named “Lead to Olympia Peak’’ and “Ringing the golden bell” on television. They help me improve my knowledge, getting more information about education, culture, and human achievements. I like wearing “Ao Dai’’ - the Vietnamese woman’s fashion, I am very pride to wear it because this is a traditional culture in Viet Nam.

Although I am still too young to seek money for studying, I try to set up my time reasonably to help my family. In my opinion, the (omit: the)time is very important. Time helps me put things in a definite order (how?). It makes my way of life possible [color=red](not clear).[/color] My hobby is reading novel. I find it fascinated and useful from reading. This hobby can be called "kill two birds with one stone" because while I am occupying my time usefully, I also at the same time gain knowledge and wisdom. Thanks to reading novel, my knowledge is improved (how?, please explain). However, I hate smoking because smoking is very dangerous. It causes many kinds of serious diseases such as lung cancer, heart attack. I wish life in the world is peafowl, the environment is not polluted.

At present, I want to get acquainted with all people in order to share my happiness as well as sadness. I like to have many good friends who have good characters such as constancy, generous, loyalty and sympathy. I want to participate in voluntary clubs. If I am a volunteer, I will help the people who have suffered from illness and handicapped children, such as clean up their house, mow their lawns, I believe that some of the happiest people in my life are people who bring happiness to the others.
In the future, I want to become a teacher English. With my knowledge, I will teach many pupils understand everything. My teacher, who is an accomplished teacher, taught me how to study (about what and how?) and I admire her English ability very much.
I am very happy because my family and my teacher always help me to get over any difficulty in my life. I hope that this is a good condition for me to learn and succeed in my life. That is why I want to take part in this exam to rub with challenge. Moreover, it can help me broaden my knowledge in writing killing (???) English.
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