#053: Thai Nhat Quang

[luvmyacnq]

Hello everybody,
Today I would like to introduce by myself. My full
name is Thai Nhat Quang.My birthday is Feb, 15th,
1991.At present, I am studying at 11A5 of Dao Duy Tu
High school.
The only word that can describe my personality
is " funny" .My nickname is Quang Beo ( Quang fat)
because I’m a big boy. And I acctualy like this
nickname.My friends consider that I am a good-natured,
pleasant, friendly, and generous person.
For me, family is the most important part of my
life.All the members of family always concern each
other.
I have a lot of hobbies such as playing games,
listening to music, taking care of my
pets. Besides that, I like to learn English so much. I
always enrich my english skills by talk with friends
who live in foreign countries. We talk together alot,
and they're always helping me fixing with my mistakes
throughout the conversation. Beside, i also watch
english films,newpapers and practing english
exercise.My best friend is Nga. She is
lovely,intelligent,studious and honest.
In the future, I want to be a computer engineer and
study abroad in England. Therefore, now I am improving
my computer and English skills.
This is the first time I take part in a contest for
English knowledge.
I belive that my english skills will be a better after
this examination. Certainly, I will have more
knowledge and more words about this language.
Throughout all the experiences of learning the new
things in the school and actually have the opportunity
to test myself for my knowledge of english is really
help me to improve my skill and thanks for that, now,
i have more confident in myself whenever i talk to
some foreign people!
Thanks and best regard,
QUANG

[dieuvuongqb]

Hello everybody,
Hôm nay I would like to introduce by (about, no "by") myself. My full
name is Thai Nhat Quang. My birthday is Feb, 15th,
1991. At present, I am studying at 11A5 of Dao Duy Tu
High school.
The only word that can describe my personality
is " funny". My nickname is Quang Beo ( Quang fat)
because I’m a big boy. And I acctualy like this
nickname. My friends consider that I am a good-natured,
pleasant, friendly, and generous person.
For me, family is the most important part of my
life. All the members of family always concern (take care of) each other.
I have a lot of hobbies such as playing games,
listening to music, taking care of my
pets. Besides that, I like to learn English so much. I
always enrich my english skills by talk (talking) with friends
who live in foreign countries. We talk together alot,
and they're always helping me fixing with my mistakes (It is better to use simple form, not continuous form)
throughout the conversation. Beside, i also watch
english films, newpapers and practing english
exercise. My best friend is Nga. She is lovely, intelligent, studious and honest.
In the future, I want to be a computer engineer and
study abroad in England. Therefore, now I am improving
my computer and English skills.
This is the first time I take part in a contest for
English knowledge.
I belive that my english skills will be a (no "a") better after this examination. Certainly, I will have (much) more knowledge and more words (new words in my glossary) about this language. Throughout all the experiences of learning the new things in the school and actually have (having) the opportunity to test myself for my knowledge of english, (it) is (no "is", as I restructure your sentence with a comma "," and start with a new phrase by using "it") really help(s) me to improve my skill and thanks for (to) that, now, i have more confident (confidence)in myself whenever i talk to some foreign people (foreigners)!
Thanks and best regard(s),
QUANG

Judge: Minh Duc
Score: Pass
Comments:
I (not "i") think this is a good chance for you to practice English (not "english"). You like to use long structure, but be careful with those structures because if you do not control your writing, it can lead to wrong understanding from your readers.
Please always check your spelling errors.
See you soon