#054: Vo Thi Nhu Trang

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My name is Vo Thi Nhu Trang .I am a student I am a seventeen_year_old girl.And I have a happy family with four members : I , my father, my mother and my sister. My father is a worker, he has a good sense of humour.He always gives a lot of laughs in my small family
Besides having a wonderful family , I have also many friends. I am a generous and condescending girl so I easily make friends. It's lucky that my friends always understand me and stand by me. When I am moody , they can help me get my troubles off.When I am happy , I share it with them. It is said that " Most people walk in and out of your life, but only friends leave footprints in your heart " I wish I would have many footprints in my heart
I am a romatic girl .I like ẹnjoying raining and dawning. I often sit by the window, fall silent and listen to the light rain begin to patter in the foliage around me.Sometimes, in the afternoon, I am used to riding along the seaside to enjoy dawning.Dusk gathers and night slowly droped upon the wide watery levels.I stand in space covered the whole scenery with the red.. I really like relishing the sweet aftertaste of that moment.
My saying is " Never say goodbye if you still want to try .Never give up if you still feel you can go on" Because we have only one life to live and if you want you can win. I am trying my best to achieve my dream is to become a doctor. I want to treat the disease and save the patient
My mother is used to saying " giving someone all your love is never an assurance that they will love you back! Don't expect love in return, just wait for it to grow in their heart but if it doesn't , be content it grew in your" So I respect and love my family and friends very much .They are indipensable parts of my life
Thank of my life which gives me a day to love

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Result: Pass
Comment:

Dear Nhu Trang,

Thank you for your interesting essay. It is really impressive and attractive when you express your own point of view about life through those famous sayings. This is really a good point of your essay.

However, I have to say that you have serious problems in grammar such as you forget to end your sentence with a dot, you do not know how to use space in front of or behind the punctuation marks which are very basic and important in both foreign language or your native language. If you reread your essay again, you will find out those mistake I have pointed out.

Please keep those mistakes in your mind and try to avoid them for the next round. If you still have these mistakes again, your essay will not be accepted, so please pay attention to them.

Thank you, with best regards.

My name is Vo Thi Nhu Trang. I am a student and I am a seventeen_year_old girl. And I have a happy family with four members : My father, my mother, my sister and I (always put us at the end). My father is a worker, he has a good sense of humor and he always brings to our small family a lot of laughs.
Besides having a wonderful family, I have also many friends. I am a generous and condescending girl so it is very easy for me to make friends. It is lucky that my friends always understand me and stand by me. When I am moody , they can help me get out of troubles. When I am happy , I share it (What is "it"? Your happiness? Please express your words clearly) with them. It is said that "Most people walk in and out of your life, but only friends leave footprints in your heart" and I wish I will have many footprints in my heart.
I am a romantic girl. I like raining and dawning. I often sit by the window, keep silent and listen to the falling rain begin to patter in the foliage around me. Sometimes, in the afternoon, I am used to riding along the seaside to enjoy dawning. Dusk gathers and night slowly dropped upon the wide watery levels. I stand in space covered the whole scenery with the red (??)... I really like relishing the sweet aftertaste of that moment.
My favorite saying is "Never say goodbye if you still want to try. Never give up if you still feel you can go on" (yeah, really nice saying). Because we have only one life to live and if you want you can win. I am trying my best to achieve my dream, which is to become a doctor. I want to treat the disease and save the patient.
My mother is used to saying that "giving someone all your love is never an assurance that they will love you back! Don't expect love in return, just wait for it to grow in their heart but if it doesn't, be content it grew in your". So I respect and love my family and friends very much. They are indispensable parts of my life
Thank of (omit: of) my life which gives me a day to love